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英语写作:大学英语四六级考试高分作文三大要素

作者: 宿迁文学网 发布时间: 2021年08月31日 14:48:00

  【12分作文】

  Nowadays, it is generally accepted that reading is of quite (much) importance. But when it comes to how to read, there has sprung up a heated discussion as to whether we should read selectively or read extensively.

  Some people are in favor of the idea of reading selectively. First, they believe that it is not how much one reads but what he reads that really counts. In addition, since one's time and effort (efforts) are limited, we (he) should read books that are suited to our (his) interests and needs.

  However, those who insist on reading extensively argue that it is through reading extensively that one can broaden his horizon. Only when one reads widely, can he really make remarkable achievements in his study.

  In my opinion, we should read selectively on the basis of reading extensively. For one thing, by reading widely we can keep ourselves well informed of as much knowledge as possible. For another, without selection, reading may become aimless and blind, which makes reading ineffective. Therefore, we should combine selective reading and extensive reading.【点评】

  本文虽出现个别语法错误(斜体部分),但结构清晰,句式多变,行文流畅,不失为一篇优秀的作文。

  首先,长句短句错落有致。本文中句式多样,,各段长短句搭配合理,如首段中第一句话简洁明了引出事实背景,然后通过when it comes to…句型自然过渡到要讨论的主题。文中对长句的运用,体现了作者较强的语言功底。

  其次,主动被动运用合理。本文首句使用被动结构it is generally accepted that…引出普遍存在的事实,恰当准确,符合书面语的文体风格。而文中其他地方尽管没有更多地运用被动语态,也是从实际的表达需要出发,并不影响本文的整体效果。

  再次,倒装强调穿插得当。文中穿插了倒装、强调等特色句式,起到了突出强调、增加气势的作用。

  第四,句与句间衔接紧密。本文无论从意思上还是形式上都非常连贯,过渡自然,连接词运用恰当准确,整篇文章给人感觉逻辑清晰,浑然一体。

  要素三:出现亮点

  一、遣词用语准确地道

  词语的选用直接关系到句子的优劣,也势必关系到段落的主体思想,进而关系到整篇文章的质量,所以“把恰当的词用到恰当的地方”成了写作者的至理名言。在写作中选择准确的词汇、使用地道的语言,不仅可以使文章的表达更加到位,更重要的是能起到“点睛”的作用,成为作文获得高分的亮点之一。

  二、开头结尾突破常规

  文章开头段除了要表明主题外,还有一个重要的任务就是要引起读者的兴趣,使文章具有与众不同的吸引力,四、六级写作阅卷往往根据第一段确定文章分数档次,如果能在开头就表现出不同凡响的语句,对于提高整个文章的分数档次会有很大的作用。

  另外,文章的结尾也同样不容忽视。结尾篇幅虽然不宜过长,但却也是决定文章成败的点睛之笔,因此可以有意识地采取某种突破常规的写作手法,让考官在读到结尾时能眼睛一亮。

  三、适当运用修辞手法

  准确恰当地使用修辞手法,会极大地增强文章的表现力,使文章更加生动形象、意蕴丰富并且引人入胜。英文写作中常见的修辞手法有比喻、平行结构、修辞问句等。

  四、恰当使用警句格言

  一篇好的作文除了要有合理的结构和布局之外,如果能有一定的文采,一定会锦上添花,而表现出文采的一个重要手段就是恰当地使用警句格言。

  【实考作文例析】 (98-6)

  Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Do “Lucky Numbers” Really Bring Good Luck? You should write at least 100 words, and base your composition on the outline(given in Chinese) below:

  1)有些人认为某些数字会带来好运

  2)我认为数字和运气无关……

  【10分作文】

  Some people say that "lucky numbers" can bring them good luck. They believe that lucky numbers make them feel safe or energetic and so they can deal with problems better.

  However, others don't believe that numbers have any connection with good luck. They think such idea (such kind of idea/such an idea) is only a superstitious belief. In fact, numbers is only number. Luck is only luck. There is no relations (relationship) between them. So far as I am concerned, "lucky numbers" have nothing to do with good luck. If lucky numbers really worked , we were not to fail anything. Numbers can never bring good luck to a person at all and our fortune is in our own hands. Therefore, everyone can have good fortune only if he tries his best.【点评】

  本文结构比较清晰,句式变化也还可以,语法错误也很少(斜体部分),但从整篇文章来看缺少语言上的亮点。

  首先,遣词用语缺乏特色。全文在用词方缺乏深度和特色,几乎都是一些过于大众化的单词,如believe, think等,不能给人留下深刻的印象。

  其次,没有恰当运用修辞。全文未运用任何恰当的修辞手法。

  再次,没有使用警句格言。全文未出现任何警句或格言。

  最后,开头结尾平淡无奇。开头结尾均没有出现有特色的句式,无法激起阅卷老师的兴奋点。

  【14分作文】

  Some people say that some numbers will bring them good luck. Take 8 for example. The Chinese pronunciation of the number “8” has almost the same sound as that of the Chinese character "发", which means making a fortune. Therefore, many Chinese people spare no money to get their telephone number or car number to include this number "8". They believe without any doubt that the number will bring them money.

  However, others don't believe that numbers have any connection with good luck. They think such kind of idea is only an ignorant and superstitious belief. They will say: How can you ever have any good luck simply because of some lucky numbers, even if you don't work hard, don't have good opportunities and don't get along well with the people around you?

  So far as I am concerned, I agree with the latter. Obviously, such belief is only a kind of superstition. Perhaps it holds true for some cases, but often it does not. Numbers can never bring good luck to a person at all and our fortune is in our own hands. Therefore, everyone can have good fortune only if he tries his best. Let's always remember "Opportunities are only for the prepared mind"and "No pains, no gains."

  【点评】

  本文之所以能够得到14分,除了结构清晰、句式多变以外,还有很多语言上的亮点。

  首先,遣词用语准确地道。如第一段第四句中spare(吝惜,节约)一词就用的很准,形象地刻画出这类人的心态。紧接着第五句中的without any doubt(不假思索)的使用也非常恰当,提醒读者不假思索地相信幸运数字是缺乏辩证思维的。另外,最后一段中的hold true也是典型的英语表达方式,显现出本文用语的地道。

  其次,适当运用修辞手法。第二段第四句运用反问使问题的答案不言自明,观点的表达更加有力。而该句中三个don’t构成排比,更加强了气势,使论证达到高潮。

  再次,恰当使用警句格言。本文的最后以两句谚语作为结束,运用恰到好处,又突显出作者的文采。

  最后,开头结尾突破常规。开头运用例证为主题提供充分验证,说服力很强。结尾用谚语收尾,使人眼前一亮。